Lewis Hunter is desperately hoping that Lilly won't recognize him...
Disclaimer - this is sorta more than 6 sentences, but it was hard to break the thoughts and dialogue, so I left them together, and I would HATE to leave you all hanging LOL!
“Have you really been around since 1934?” she asked.
My smile faltered.
Her next sentences tumbled out in a rush. “The sign out front says…I mean, of course you haven't! Maybe a grandfather? Great-Uncle?” The words tripped over each other, left her cheeks flushed pink.
Do yourself a favor and check out the other Six Sentences from talented writers near and far. Click the logo to get the links!No questions! "My grandfather." I held my breath.
“Oh. That makes sense," she said, but continued to study me, her face a picture of perplexity. She leaned in, as if for closer inspection, and I stepped back, fearing what I'd do if she crossed that line I'd drawn - the one that kept her safe.
Oh, and happy Mother's Day to all the moms out there!
gets better and better - what are you up to? quite the mystery can't figure out where going
ReplyDeleteOooh! Wondering what he is.
ReplyDeleteOhh...Love how she is brushing against danger and not knowing it! Great Six(ish)!
ReplyDeleteOh, I want to know what the sign says. Great six.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing - is it a vamprire? What is going on here? Looking forward to more!
ReplyDeleteIntriguing!
ReplyDeleteYour six sentences intrigued me so much that I went back and read your past four entries! I'm lovin' this story.
ReplyDeleteTerrific six! Always enjoy your posts.
ReplyDeleteOo, very intriguing. Makes me want to know more about what's going on now, and before!
ReplyDeleteThe line that kept her safe! Yikes! You hint just enough to keep us coming back.
ReplyDeleteGreat six, again! Love the idea of keeping her safe and she bumbling in.
ReplyDeleteInteresting.
ReplyDeleteLove his tension, and wondering what that last line means! Great six.
ReplyDeleteI'm so intrigued! You know how to keep us begging for more!
ReplyDeleteRoberta,
ReplyDeleteWhat's wrong with leaving us hanging. I do it all the time.
I love the nervous humor of Lily and the calmness of Lewis even with the tension he was starting to feel if she moved closer
I want to know more about this mystery. An intriguing six!
ReplyDeleteooo very interesting. Great six, Roberta
ReplyDeleteOoh, this sounds very intriguing! Great six!
ReplyDeleteHooked. Want to know more about this line of his.
ReplyDeleteI love how her question was misinterpreted, giving you a hint of what his secret might be. And then what DOES happen if she crosses the line? eek.
ReplyDeleteThanks all. I have let my writing/blogging/tweeting/FBing to take a back seat to life the past few weeks - 2 jobs, a farm with lots of newborn lambs, and well - it's spring! But your kind comments have spurred to me finish the damn book! The last scene is finally taking shape and then I can start revising and maybe, just maybe someday get it out there! That would be my dream come true!
ReplyDeleteWhat is he? I ahve an idea but you really pulled me in
ReplyDeleteHa ha, Jayel, my goal is that you don't find out 'till well into the book :) If I've done it right, that is and readers don't toss it aside (that's if it ever gets out there!) in frustration first!
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