Sunday, April 24, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - Episode Eight

Last week, we left Lewis wondering if perhaps Lilly does remember...Something...

I'm at a dog trial this weekend  (see the "Me" tab on this blog to find out what that's all about!) so won't be able to comment on all the other great authors' Six Sentences until Monday. 

You should head over to the Six Sentence Sunday site to see who's taking part this week.  Or why not participate yourself?  Sign up from Tuesday pm, post your six from any WIP or finished piece before 9 a.m. on the following Sunday and voila, you're part of the fun SSS family!

I turned away. “Should I wrap those filets for you?”
“Um. Sure.” 
“How many?” 
Three. One of her parent’s friends? Or a boyfriend? I wrapped the steaks. My hands were clumsy, fingers sticking to the tape.
Happy reading!

Sunday, April 17, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - Episode Seven

Continuing from last week...

Lilly has just almost fainted (or something) as she scrutinizes Lewis Hunter in the butcher shop. He laughs when she tells him she's a vegetarian - a private joke? Remember, he likes his own meat almost raw...

She worried at her bottom lip, an endearing and surprisingly sexy tick. “That's not why I felt ill, though.”

Still staring at me with flinty eyes, she stood, her legs unfolding like snow-bent trees after a thaw; gracefully, slowly, as if she expected them to buckle again under some invisible weight that only I could see.

This was not good.

When she was being whisked away on the stretcher, she had met my eyes - called me her angel.

Had she been lucid?
Happy Sunday!

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Sunday, April 10, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - Episode Six


Continuing the awkward little scene in the butcher shop between Lewis Hunter - a half human who is trying to lay low and NOT be recognized - especially by Lilly Young.

When she looked up, her color was distinctly better and her gaze--somehow both mortified and accusing - took up where it had left off, searching my face for some hint.

I looked down, only then noticing that I still sported my red-stained apron. Darker, older blood that no amount of bleach could remove lay underneath the fresh stains. I looked like a grisly Edvard Munch painting, one entitled 'Penance'.

I removed it hastily, tossing it behind the counter.

"I'm a vegetarian,” said Lilly.

I laughed.

Read the Sixes from all the other participants by clicking HERE. Happy SUNday. Yes! It finally is sunny here. Feels like spring at last!

Thursday, April 7, 2011

Are You Human? Fun with Word Verifications

You know those annoying word verifications you have to complete before posting a comment on some blogs? The ones that check to verify that you're human and not some spam bot waiting to clog the poor Blogger's inbox with viruses?

I always picture a green headed alien typing a comment and then deleting it when he is forced to answer that question...

Anyway, how good are your language-building skills? I'll admit, I have no experience with language creation in world building (my current - endless - WIP is set in a modern city). But I find too complex a language utterly distracting when I'm reading. However, if it's well done, and just enough to pull the reader into an alternate world without throwing us into a swirling black hole of "huh?", it adds to the world the author has built.

So, I thought I'd put those annoying WVs to use. Here's where I take a choice WV and use it in a sentence or dialogue. Do you know the meaning right off the bat, without having to guess? If yes, I've succeeded in that little piece of language creation. And that would be frexing brilly.

This week's Word Verification comes from Bethany Robison's blog.

Bethany is also part of the Ink Slingers Girls. Go over and give both blogs a follow. I won a coveted copy of Beth Revis' Across the Universe on Bethany's blog, so of course, she is awesome in my book.

Here is the Word Verification I had to type before I commented this morning: Stinitio

And here is my first attempt:

Kat tried on the shoes. She'd never worn such high heels before. These were a shiny vampire red, matching the hilt of her lightsword perfectly.

"Stinitios are hard to walk in, at first," the saleslady commented. "But they're kick-ass sexy, don't you agree?"

Kat admired the length of her leg and the way the shoes shaped her calves. "Yes," she said. "I'll take them."

Have fun with your Word Verifications today! And for more great information on World Building, head on over to the Wednesday Word Building Workshops at Juliette Wade's Talk to YoUniverse blog.

Sunday, April 3, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - Episode Five

Taking off (almost) from last week's snippet from RESET.

Half human Lewis Hunter is serving Lilly in the butcher shop where he works, trying to remain anonymous, hoping she doesn't remember him. She is scrutinizing him, trying to place him...

Possible Lewis Hunter? (I had Alex Pettyfer in my mind, but seems like he's going to be overly used LOL) Image source

“Are you okay?” It was something a concerned stranger might ask. “You don't look so good."

I was good at lying, after so much practice.

She pulled off her woolen hat. Her glorious chestnut hair spilled forward as she put her head between her knees.

"It’s okay,” she said, voice shaking. “It’ll pass in a minute.”

To be continued...

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